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I want a serious opinion/review on my writing?

Jul 17, 2010 by Emma | Posted in Books & Authors

right, first of all I'm only 13, and this is the first book i've wrote. I know some of the grammar and punctuation/spelling is off, but i will fix that soon.

Btw, im from England.

But you don't have to be nice as i want a

You really need to strengthen your verbs. In a lot of the places you say "was," or use otherwise weak verbs, you could fix things up with just a few simple changes. For example:
>The forest was filled with light filtering through every

Mudkip | Jul 17, 2010

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